Thread: A poem by Rookie

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This is my first poem since high school. I had to start off with a more whimsical poem. Maybe if I gain a little experience, I can kick out some of the more darkly romantic stuff that you guys have been posting. (Which are awesome, by the way). Brutal criticism is welcome and encouraged. I can take it. The background is a picture of a painting that I found on the net, and I just pasted the poem on top of it just for fun.


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I like it!

What brutal criticism man, that poem ROCKS!! It reminds me of my own past Halloween's, and I was excited for the little girl having fun as I read it....really dig the way you presented it too!!

Now we've seen what you can do, so I expect you to treat us with more.

Very nice Rookie its very sweet and nostalgic Please post more!!!

AWWWWW....Rookie, what a sweet heart you have!!! And there's no criticism needed, my friend, that was really good!!!

I agree with MHooch, you DO have a sweet heart, I loved the poem, brought back memories of being a kid, and how exciting everything was! Thank you for your poem, please, continue to write more!!

I can only echo everyone else, it's lovely. And I like the end because it doesn't lead you to believe it will end with those words.

Very Cool Rookie. Brought back some cherished images...Keep the poems coming.