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Halloween Night,
Thanks!

I did another quick study.

I took Terra's suggestion of using purple and added red; I took out the orange entirely. I like it. It's a good dusk sky--that point past sunset but before night-- and it has a slightly creepy feel to it, but it's not nearly so obviously Halloween-ish as the first study. Comments anyone?

Everybody, thanks a lot. I really appreciate the commentary. It's taking me a while to get my Halloween sea legs in my glass art and feedback from people who [I]really[I] know Halloween is invaluable. After all, nobody here is afraid to say something looks cute/spooky instead of creepy/scary or eerie or whatever. Not that cute doesn't have a place, it's just not what I going for here. I'll try to knock out another study using the purple with the orange while I test fire a purple over black glass sample.

i liked the background colors of the first drawing much better. i think it is because of the way you presented the colors. this new one is just to much like, well, like i could do. and i like the placement of your props better as well. to me just seems more well laid out.

I agree with hallorenscene, I like the impact of the first one. This new one is still cool but the first one has the emotion of Halloween. The contrast between the black (or purplish-black) and the vivid orange/yellow hits you.

The second is a great second study though. If you can keep the colors very saturated, it would also have great impact. In the drawing it's a bit washed out.

I also like the first better.

I love what you have done so far on the original, but not being at all familiar with glass fusing I don't think my opinions will be very helpful.

I would cut off some of the right, or move the scarecrow out just so there won't be "empty space"... Adding a brighter sky with red and yellows would be great! But after seeing the second drawing I prefer the first.

If the crows will be too fine when you got to the glass portion could you make it look like the bird is farther away so you only have to have a basic shape of wings and a body? But also if the bird detail is too fine will you lose the detail of the barbed wire and other small bits?? I hope not because all the little details you have put in there are great!

Here is my two cents for what its worth. The first picture has much more movement and emotion. The impact of the contrast evokes feeling. I would try seeing what it looks like as is, but with larger objects. Increase the size of the scarecrow and the corn. Bolder subject matter with the same colors. Deeper oranges and possible a bit of red and a much darker subject could add to it. Or of course it could ruin the whole thing I said it was just my two cents Good luck with this and keep us posted

I liked the first one better, it really had an ominous feel to it. The shades of yellow kept me from looking away; very spooky

im in with the first one as well.

the only constructive thing i can really add is that the scare crow and the wheat would be great just a little larger. might be able to keep some of the detail that way too

Everyone, thanks for the feedback. The first one is a better piece in terms of composition, detail and technique. The 2nd was more about seeing the colors--it doesn't suck, but it just isn't the piece that the frist one is. I've got a test tile in the kiln now to see if I can give the black a purple tint with a transparent violet overlay, but dark transparent over dark opaque is a crap shoot.

You are all right. The orange sky really pops much more than the indigo to red layered sky does. It was a good experiment but just not the right look for this work, so I'm going to stick with the orange varigated sky for the most part. I'm translating the image from Berol Prismacolor pencils on 9x12 130# linen textured paper to sifted powdered glass on 5x8 glass sheet. I'll try to sqeak in some fine glass threads if i can get away with it--the hassle of class assignments: I don't have complete artistic control-- and i should be able to keep some fine line detail that way. the flying crow is the biggest obstacle because it has such a delicate ragged outlin and very thin feet and claws. I'm resigned to losing it. i'd rather have it gone than be an indistinct smudge. i've scanned the original drawing and mainpulated it to get reduced images from which to cut the stencils. that's the project for tonight. My brother helpfully suggested that i use the full size image but cut the stencils from that shrinydink plastic. Creative, but i don't think it would really work.

thanks for all the help. I'll post the final result once it's done. I should be able to post it by the evening of the 30th unless something goes catastrophically wrong during firing or annealing. Wish me luck!

your right, the second one was good just not to our tastes as the first one.
i hear you about the complete artistic control. i tried that in high school and got thrown out of class. you have to comply to their terms and cut your own losses.